Post by Puffmonkie on Jul 3, 2005 5:35:36 GMT -5
Hi everybody! Here is my rough draft for the first page of my first kikyou/sess doujinshi.
www.deviantart.com/view/20157716/
read it from left to right.
I'm just gonna paste what I have in the description in case some people don't look at it, so here:
looks terrible, I know. it's just a rough draft. the following is what i have planned after the last panel u see in the picture.
Kikyou:Who are you?
Sess.:You look pathetic crawling on the ground like that. You humans truly are weak.
Kikyou: Who are you?! Why do you look like Inuyasha?!
Sess: Don't confuse me with that disgusting hanyou. If anything, I'm here to kill him.
Kikyou: What did you say? I'm the one who's going to kill him!
Sess:Hmph, Not in that condition...You can't even stand can you?
(Kikyou glares, sits up, tries to stand, winces in pain and clutches her bleeding shoulder. Keeps her head down, angry and ashamed at the same time)
-sound of the village youkai alarm bell/gong, Inuyasha began his attack on the village
Sess: You would do better to tend to those weak villagers first. (it sounds like he means that she go help the villagers, since she's a priestess and all, but he actually means that she should go get her wound treated, but of course, he would never say that...)
Kikyou: (Kaede!)<<--i think she should be more concerned about her sister than she was in the anime, Her sister's safety should have crossed her mind at least once.
Sess:Then you can watch as I, Sesshoumaru destroy that fool inuyasha.
(Kikyou's head still down, you can't see her eyes. She knows she doesnt have the strength in her to fight. She's lost alot of blood and she's emotionally broken. The dark side of her wants Inuyasha to pay for his betrayal and suffer a long,painful death. Sesshoumaru could do that in her place. Yet, she doesn't know if she really want her first love, inuyasha to die and she doesn't know if she can trust sesshoumaru. Sesshoumaru, knowing that she is weakened and running out of time, offers his hand to help her up. why is he being so kind? does he have some kind of plan with her, or is it random sympathy? you'll find out later...when i make it up)
Sess: come (or "Let's go." which sounds better?)
(full page- frontal view of kikyou's mad+sad+hurt face and her hand in sesshoumaru's.)
(sesshoumaru's eyes-a little surprised at this beautiful and emotional face. He'll never forget it<--definitely gonna ease the progression to romance later on
;D
*btw, i think i can hear ruby-sama and my hidden hearts buddies squealing* lol. kidding. i know that dialogue sounds weird cuz it's all rushed and stuff. I'm not the best writer there is, which is why i dont do fanfics. it helps if u keep in mind that if this happened, they'd be talking slow, and there'd be some pauses in between the lines.
So yeah, that's what I have so far. Still thinking about what's gonna happen to Inuyasha and Naraku. The shikon jewel. Kagome? If Kikyou doesnt die, would she exist or just be reincarnated from someone else? just wondering, but really, i don't think she's worth writing about
www.deviantart.com/view/20157716/
read it from left to right.
I'm just gonna paste what I have in the description in case some people don't look at it, so here:
looks terrible, I know. it's just a rough draft. the following is what i have planned after the last panel u see in the picture.
Kikyou:Who are you?
Sess.:You look pathetic crawling on the ground like that. You humans truly are weak.
Kikyou: Who are you?! Why do you look like Inuyasha?!
Sess: Don't confuse me with that disgusting hanyou. If anything, I'm here to kill him.
Kikyou: What did you say? I'm the one who's going to kill him!
Sess:Hmph, Not in that condition...You can't even stand can you?
(Kikyou glares, sits up, tries to stand, winces in pain and clutches her bleeding shoulder. Keeps her head down, angry and ashamed at the same time)
-sound of the village youkai alarm bell/gong, Inuyasha began his attack on the village
Sess: You would do better to tend to those weak villagers first. (it sounds like he means that she go help the villagers, since she's a priestess and all, but he actually means that she should go get her wound treated, but of course, he would never say that...)
Kikyou: (Kaede!)<<--i think she should be more concerned about her sister than she was in the anime, Her sister's safety should have crossed her mind at least once.
Sess:Then you can watch as I, Sesshoumaru destroy that fool inuyasha.
(Kikyou's head still down, you can't see her eyes. She knows she doesnt have the strength in her to fight. She's lost alot of blood and she's emotionally broken. The dark side of her wants Inuyasha to pay for his betrayal and suffer a long,painful death. Sesshoumaru could do that in her place. Yet, she doesn't know if she really want her first love, inuyasha to die and she doesn't know if she can trust sesshoumaru. Sesshoumaru, knowing that she is weakened and running out of time, offers his hand to help her up. why is he being so kind? does he have some kind of plan with her, or is it random sympathy? you'll find out later...when i make it up)
Sess: come (or "Let's go." which sounds better?)
(full page- frontal view of kikyou's mad+sad+hurt face and her hand in sesshoumaru's.)
(sesshoumaru's eyes-a little surprised at this beautiful and emotional face. He'll never forget it<--definitely gonna ease the progression to romance later on
;D *btw, i think i can hear ruby-sama and my hidden hearts buddies squealing* lol. kidding. i know that dialogue sounds weird cuz it's all rushed and stuff. I'm not the best writer there is, which is why i dont do fanfics. it helps if u keep in mind that if this happened, they'd be talking slow, and there'd be some pauses in between the lines.
So yeah, that's what I have so far. Still thinking about what's gonna happen to Inuyasha and Naraku. The shikon jewel. Kagome? If Kikyou doesnt die, would she exist or just be reincarnated from someone else? just wondering, but really, i don't think she's worth writing about
